Rough-Cut Pitch Reflection

I have now pitched the rough-cut of my production to a small proportion of my target audience and my teacher. Here is some of the feedback I received:

In retrospect, I have received some very positive feedback from both my target audience and my teacher. Some of the positives were, good use of music, hard work has paid off and a really good story line that works effectively. My Teacher agreed with these comments but has give me the following corrections that could improve my product. She stated that the music was good but had too much bass. Moreover, she suggested shortening some shots to keep the audience more orientated. She also said that including a logo and animating my final title "UNWANTED" could be animated for greater effect. Some of my target audience agreed with these improvements. However, overall I have received positive feedback that will help improve my product, and they are fairly easy to do.